After reading these materials, I would like you to take a look at the examples of three (3) poorly written business communications that I have also published to the Content section.

Hello Class,

For this week, I would like you to read Chapter Four (4) of the textbook, which deals with document revision. Please also see the Content section of Blackboard for an e-handout on the subject.

After reading these materials, I would like you to take a look at the examples of three (3) poorly written business communications that I have also published to the Content section.

Your assignment for this week is to revise one (1) of these examples using all of the techniques that you have learned from the materials.

All assignments will be due on Sunday, September 20th, by 11:59 p.m. Please submit your post as a thread to this forum for grading, and as usual, do not submit your post as an attachment (e.g., .docx, .PDF, etc.)

Have a great week!

– Professor McDonnell
Example 2:

November 4th, 2007

Mr. Mike Adams

Wellington Corporation

335 14th Street

New York, NY 10009

Dear John,

I am writing to you in regards to the available salesman position at your company.

I am a 1995 Elite University alumni with a masters in Computer Science.  After graduating with a 4.0 average, I began my next venture as a school counselor at my local church group. Moving forward, I am currently looking to apply both my analytical and communication skills to a notable firm such as the Wellington Corporation.

With my extensive customer service background, I will be able to provide your customers with a quality experience.

Thank you again for your time and Im looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Kind Regards,

Joe smith